EXCLUSIVE LPAT writing past paper sample script, plus comments, so you know what HKEAA expects. The writer of the script scored Level 4-4.5 in his LPAT presentation.
The LPAT Challenge
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A taste of what you get-- the script
Have you heard of the catchphrase ‘three low and one high’? I can see some of you nodding. I’m not talking about the guidelines to a healthy diet—low sugar, low fat, low salt and high in fibre. I’m referring to the features of ‘Kong kids’, who have self-care ability, low AQ, or adversity quotient, and low EQ, or emotional quotient. According to some people, these greenhouse flowerets are not good at taking care of themselves, facing adversities and managing their own emotions…My father used to have toolbox with spanners, screwdrivers, a monkey wrench, hammers, a huge mallet, you name it. Whenever the door wouldn’t lock or the toilet refused to flush, he could found a way to work around his tools and make them work again. In my view, this practical, hands-on, handy-man, problem-solving quality inside of us is being eroded down the generations. And you can’t blame our children. Instead of pointing our fingers at them, we need a deep soul-searching. Are you sometimes ‘Kong moms’, ‘Kong dads’ and ‘Kong teachers’? Are we sometimes overprotective or even doting? Do we occasionally underestimate our children? We, as adults, need to remind not just our children but also ourselves that we will not always be there to handle every little thing for them and that dealing with one’s own problem is the sine qua non for growth.
A taste of what you get-- the comments
Task completion
o The tone is appropriate for a forum. Although it is a controversial topic and involving attributing responsibility to parents sometimes, it is done so subtly and in an inspiring way. The speech does not sound like it is laying blame on anyone.
o Given the context of a forum, it is a good idea to explore the wider social aspect of the problem, which this speech has successfully done so, with reference to long working hour, and the lower birth rate.
o Use of expressions like ‘you see’ gives a more oratory tone, suitable for this text type.
Vocab and grammar
o Good use of a great variety of sophisticated grammatical patterns, e.g. ‘Not only did she develop…’ (inversion), ‘We, as adults, need to remind not just our children but also ourselves that we will not always be there to handle every little thing for them and that dealing with one’s own problem is the sine qua non for growth.’ (prepositional phrase as adverbial, not only…but also, compound sentence, that-clause as subject)
Organization and coherence
o The use of humour in the beginning can successfully capture the attention of the audience, and can illustrate the features of Kong kids, which is the substance of the label. What is most impressive is that the ‘three high and one low’ label is followed through throughout the rest of the speech, framing the discussion about Hilary, the inventors, the solution and role that schools and parents can play.
o The poignant personal anecdote in the conclusion makes a powerful statement. The series of ‘soul-searching’ questions towards the end both enables the audience’s self-reflection, but also reiterates the main idea that it is not the children’s fault.
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